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In the future all cars, buses and truck will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

#future #cars #buses #truck #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
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 in transit system has resulted in the emergence of
artificaial
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artificial
 transportation, which induces numerous effects
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humanities'
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 life. From my perspective, I believe its merits thoroughly
outweight
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outweigh
 the downsides. In
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this controversial topics
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 with various
rationale
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rationales
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. On the one hand,
driverless
 transit
offer
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 residents a wide range of benefits.
Firstly
,
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convinience
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convenience
 aspect
need
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 to be taken into consideration. As
the
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automobiled
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automobile
automobiles
vehicles
 are widely applied, people don't need to spend their time controlling cars, enhancing their work productivity as now they can invest their time into more scientific and
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 activities. Not only do
the
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artifical
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artificial
vehicles
 improve people's experience whenever travelling
,
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they
also
 limit the risks
peoples
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 have to face with evidently . As
the
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driverless
 car arise extensively, traffic collision rates are likely to be halved, as human errors hardly
appears
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, unless these artificial transportation are not
well-programed
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.
For instance
, many modernized
metropolis
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has
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 applied
driverless
 cars as their main commuting tools.
As a result
,
a
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higher safety and
reiable
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reliable
 figures in accidents have been recorded, proving
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automobiled
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automobile
automobiles
 cars' priceless value.
On the other hand
, it is evident that using
driverless
vehicles
 can lead to some unpleasant consequences. Their exorbitant prices can create a financial burden for
whether
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 residents and
goverments
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governments
government
.
Moreover
, fixing prices for
theses
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invention
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 seems
unafordable
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unaffordable
affordable
 with a majority of
peoples
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 wealth demographics. It can be considered as a potent motive which
deteriorate
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 the gap between rich and poor. Another
worth-considering
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issue is the safe dependence of producers. As can be seen manifestly, people should possess a strong belief in their
vehicles
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vehicle
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 choices and trust the AI techniques utterly, which means unprecedented dangers viably
appears
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 and travellers are continuously fraught with mortality collisions.
To sum up
, I do believe that using
driveless
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vehicles
 has its upsides
overshadow
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 the disadvantages. Yet, there are several defects of
this
 tendency, which can be thoroughly addressed in the
not too distant
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 future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon footprint
  • public transport
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerable to hacking
  • mobility solutions
  • liability
  • ethical concerns
  • initial investments
  • maintenance costs
  • fuel consumption
  • optimized routes
  • transition
  • sectors reliant on human drivers
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