The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph gives an overview of death and birth proportions in Switzerland between the period of 1970 to 2020 given by UN statistics.
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, the ratio of
birth
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rising
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constantly in the
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decades. The death rate was the same before 2000,
however
, it turned over after 1990 to continued dipping in the
last
decades. With respect to births, the number of births was at the minimum rate in 1970
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to in 1980
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record
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1.25 million
newborn
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at that time. From 1990 to 2000 there was a notable increase related to child-birth at the rate of about 1 million more in 2000. The constant rise of new-borns continued to arrive
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higher percentage in 2020 recorded
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million at that time. Regarding deaths, in the thirty years from 1970 to 1990 the dying proportions rose to reach a peak in 1990. From
then
the numbers started reducing in the following thirty years to achieve the lowest number of deaths in 2020.
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