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Some people say that e- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt, that we have seen a huge development , especially in the
last
 several years, one of the things that have changed is the conventional
books
 that can not be used on phones, laptops or any device
such
 as
E-
books
, so for those reasons a lot of people believe that
E-
books
 will completely replace the traditional
books
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw personal
conclusion
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conclusions
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. On the one hand, paper
books
 have that unique vibe that brings you joy
while
 reading them, and
also
 keeps you away from your phone.
However
, it has many disadvantages as much as the advantages.
For instance
, it can affect the environment by throwing
books
 in the trash or even putting them in your house, which can lead to fires.
On the other hand
,
E-
books
 trending for a lot of reasons, I will mention 3 factors that may let these kinds of
books
 go viral 1- easy to use and
also
 to read, 2- affordable ,and 3- you can take it anywhere.
For example
, when you have your book on your phone you don't need to bring it back to the library and
also
 you can take it from your friend who actually has,
for
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 free. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points of view, I believe that
E-
books
 are better than old
books
 and I personally prefer having an electronic book to the old-fashioned ones, to keep saving the world and
also
 to protect the environment from falling apart.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-books (electronic books)
  • digital media
  • traditional media
  • interactivity
  • multimedia
  • tactile experience
  • preservation
  • nostalgia
  • digital divide
  • digital fatigue
  • screen time
  • financial viability
  • misinformation
  • instantaneous access
  • environmental sustainability
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