The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table illustrates the percentage of spending on three
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of items by consumers of five European
countries
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in the year 2002.
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, all five
countries
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spent more on food, drinks and tobacco.
This
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was three times more than the next most popular item which
iwas
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was
clothing and footwear. All
countries
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spent the least on leisure and education. In terms of the sales
in
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food, drinks and tobacco,
Turkey
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had the highest spending (32.14%).
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, Ireland was
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high in numbers but was 4% less. The three remaining
countries
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ranged between 15% to 18%, it was almost half less than what
Turkey
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had achieved. The next item was clothing and footwear, Italy ranged at 9% being the top in
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item.
On the other hand
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, Sweden, Ireland, Spain and
Turkey
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were almost similar
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percentages ranging
at
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from
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6% more or slightly less.
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, all
countries
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paid less
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leisure and education, 4.35% being the highest was
Turkey
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. The
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was Spain reported only 1.98% which was not far from the amount of Ireland, Italy and Sweden.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, turkey with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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