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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 the data of a survey about the Australian citizen's consumption habits of tea and
coffee
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 and how often they are buying these in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and
Hobart
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.
Overall
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, the proportion of individuals who
visted
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visited
 a cafe in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks is substantial in almost all cities except
Adelaide
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 where
the
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instant
coffee
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is have
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 been slightly more
poular
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popular
. The purchase made for
the
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fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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 couple of fortnights is the lowest in every city and for instant
coffee
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 it is average. In detail, the percentage of people
visting
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visiting
 a
coffee
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 bar was at a peak of 63% in
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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. It was 62% in
Sydney
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, 55% in
Brisbane
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 and around 49% in
Adelaide
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.
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 to
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this
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 the mass popularity of fresh
coffee
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 was low and the purchase statistics in
Sydney
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 was 43%, in
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Melbourne
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Melbourne,
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 it was 42%, nearly 35% in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 and 34% in
Hobart
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.
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, instant
coffee
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 was more popular among
the
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Australians and within in
last
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 four weeks 43% in
Sydney
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, 48% in
Melbourne
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, 50%, 53% ,
54
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and 54
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% in
Adelaide
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,
Brisbane
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 and
Hobart
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, respectively.
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