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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 the data of a survey about the Australian citizen's consumption habits of tea and
coffee
 and how often they are buying these in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
 and
Hobart
.
Overall
, the proportion of individuals who
visted
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visited
 a cafe in
last
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the last
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 four weeks is substantial in almost all cities except
Adelaide
 where
the
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instant
coffee
is have
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 been slightly more
poular
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popular
. The purchase made for
the
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fresh
coffee
 in
last
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 couple of fortnights is the lowest in every city and for instant
coffee
 it is average. In detail, the percentage of people
visting
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visiting
 a
coffee
 bar was at a peak of 63% in
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
. It was 62% in
Sydney
, 55% in
Brisbane
 and around 49% in
Adelaide
.
In contrast
 to
this
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 the mass popularity of fresh
coffee
 was low and the purchase statistics in
Sydney
 was 43%, in
Melbourne
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Melbourne,
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 it was 42%, nearly 35% in
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
 and 34% in
Hobart
.
Whereas
, instant
coffee
 was more popular among
the
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Australians and within in
last
 four weeks 43% in
Sydney
, 48% in
Melbourne
, 50%, 53% ,
54
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and 54
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% in
Adelaide
,
Brisbane
 and
Hobart
, respectively.
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