You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

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The given bar graph delineates the information related to the sales of the five most popular cell phone companies that are Samsung, Apple,

Nokia

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, LG and ZTE between the period of 2009 and 2013. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it is readily apparent that

Nokia

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and Samsung had a major change from 2009 to 2013. In 2009, the most popular phone was

Nokia

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, which was about 449,

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however

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however,

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the value abated to 425 and 250 in 2011 and 2013, respectively.

Nokia

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was followed by

the

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apply

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Samsung, accounting for 225 in 2009,

for

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and for

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2011 and 2013, statistics

was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

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325 and 450. Apple company was the least known during 2009,

only

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with only

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25. Somehow,

this

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ratio had a drastic increase in 2011 which is 99.

This

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further

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increased to 150 in 2013. LG was declined over the period of time, which is 120 for 2009, 98 for 2011 and 70 for 2013.

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, ZTE had

inclining

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an inclining

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graph, which is 50 in 2009 and 51 and 54 for 2011 and 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nokia with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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5
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

168 words

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