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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Acessing
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Accessing
knowledged
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knowledge
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 freely all around the world through the
internet
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 now is very popular and common.
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
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 trend. On the one hand, there
is
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 various reasons why accessing knowledge freely through the
internet
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 is beneficial. A common reason is that it makes learning more convenient. It is because students can learn everywhere they want,
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and search
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information
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for information
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 anytime using a phone or a computer. In fact, there are many students
study
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who study
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on online
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online on
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devise
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devices
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, websites,
they
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and they
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 can use online tools
with
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 their projects, jobs,
studies
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and studies
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.
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, many use AI tools like Chat GPT, Gemini or YouTube, Google for difficult tasks, topics. Another factor can be that all of
those
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knowledges
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knowledge
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are
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 free,
it
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 can
reduces
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cost
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 for students.
People
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 have
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 opinion because there are several online courses and documents
are
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that are
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 free.
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,
platform
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a platform
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 like Musecore
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student
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students
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want
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who want
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 to study music. Which
help
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helps
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 those who cannot afford traditional education.
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, there are
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 of disadvantages of accessing knowledge freely through
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internet
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the internet
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 that
people
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 should take
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 consideration. One obvious drawback is the spread of false
informations
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information
.
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 means
people
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 can believe in
wrong
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a wrong
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 fact.
There for
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Therefore
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,
It
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 can lead to confusion or
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 situations.
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 in health problems, fake medical advice can harm
people
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. Another negative effect
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 it may reduce deep thinking. It is because
people
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 depend
to
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too
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 much
in
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on
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 quick
answer
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answers
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. In
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 can hurt their
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apply
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ability to solve problems.
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 student might copy
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an answer
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instead
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 of learning In conclusion, accessing knowledge freely through the
internet
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 all around the world could bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked. My view is that it brings more advantages than disadvantages, if
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 carefully

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
Try to use varied vocabulary and sentence structure to make your writing more interesting.
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Provide more specific examples and details to support your points.
positive
Your discussion of the benefits of free knowledge is clear and well stated.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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