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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

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Global travelling by
aircraft
 has become more popular among
people
 in the
last
 decade.
This
 is
due to
 lower cost compared to the past and the little time required for trips by plane. I think it is a bad tendency which results in a lot of environmental issues and
noise
pollution
 in cities near airports. In recent days
air
travel
 has become the most common way to
travel
 abroad because of its low cost and little time for transportation.
While
 in the past decades, only wealthy
people
 could afford it, now almost every person around the world has travelled by plane.
Additionally
,
air
travel
 is the fastest way to go anywhere, so with an increase in travelling abroad, the number of
people
 who use
aircraft
 rises.
For example
, there are a lot of low costers in
air
 companies that have low-price tickets to almost every destination with the increased numbers of seats.
Nevertheless
, an increase in
aircraft
travel
 has some adverse effects on the environment and
also
 increases
noise
pollution
.
For instance
, the fuel for
aircraft
 is kerosine, which burns toxic products in the atmosphere, which leads to negative effects on global warming and ozone layer depletion.
Moreover
, the places located near airports are suffering from
noise
pollution
, which has harmful effects on the well-being of
people
 who live in those places.
To conclude
, the reasons for an increase in global
air
travel
 are the decrease in the costs of flights and fast travelling.
However
,
this
 trend is negative for the environment because of
noise
pollution
 and the deterioration of current global issues.
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  • Disposable income
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  • Budget airlines
  • Globalization
  • Tourism
  • Social media
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  • Economic development
  • Cultural exchange
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