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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that the invention of the
computer
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 has profoundly transformed our contemporary society.
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 there are numerous benefits produced by
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, I would strongly disagree with
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 view because there have been other important creations over the past ten decades as important as the
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. On the one hand, there are many reasons to explain why
people
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 view the
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 as the most important invention of the
last
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 hundred
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. A significant benefit of
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 is the innovation of information processes, which makes information storage and analysis more accessible so that everyone can do it. In my school,
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, now we can obtain our GPA immediately just by a click in software like Excel, but about 20
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 ago when
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 had not become popular in university it might have taken us an entire day to get it.
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, the rapid development of
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 games encourages
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 to spend more time which is used to enjoy other entertainment on the
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, enhancing the importance of
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 for
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.
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, I believe in the past ten decades, inventions in other fields
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 as medicine and space exploration should be considered as significant as
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.
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, past 100
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 humans have successfully developed numerous new medicines which have assisted millions of
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 recovering from severe diseases and prolonged the anticipated lifetime of current
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. Another invention that should be regarded as the technique of space exploration, providing
people
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 with a new angle to survey the universe and planet we are living on. Thanks to
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 development, now we can launch rockets to Mars and analyse materials of its soil which was impossible for
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 living 100
years
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 ago.
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, it is not even a dream for us to migrate to Mars within 50
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 future. In conclusion,
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computers
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 undoubtedly help us address some problems, I still contend that there are some innovations that should be deemed as important as the
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 as medicine and space exploration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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