The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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The given maps illustrate the radical changes that have taken place in Grange
Park
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from 1920 until now.
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, the
park
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has been developed under the trend of relocation and modernization. Regarding the centre of the map, it is notable that the entrances, which used to be located to the north and south of the
park
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in 1920, stayed unchanged. A large central rose garden has been added in the area where the fountain was previously located. Many seats used to be scattered around the
park
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have been concentrated around the rose bed, which makes it more convenient for visitors to sit. To the left of the rose
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, it can be clearly seen that the stage for musicians has been converted into a modern amphitheatre for concerts. Other alternations have taken place of the rose garden and the pond, including the construction of the café and children’s play area.
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, the glasshouse has
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become flattened, which makes room for a water feature. Next to it, a new entrance underground car
park
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has been opened, which makes it much more favourable for visitors.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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