The maps show a beachfront in Australia in 1950 and today.

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The given maps illustrate the radical changes

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a beach

area

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from 1950 to nowadays.

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, The beachfront

area

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has been upgraded to meet the tourism demand and modern facilities have been added. The

area

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near the main road

is remained

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remains

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almost unchanged. The tables and the pavilion are unchanged. But the playground

is flatten

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is flattened

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to make space for a new car park. So it has 2 car parks

parellel

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parallel

to the road.

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, the road is extended southwards. Turning to the beachfront

area

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, it has become more built-up. The lighthouse

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apply

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stayed the same. The swimming pool in the west is augmented. The restaurant and two surf

club

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clubs

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are newly constructed.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

112 words

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