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Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

A large number of people think that institutes should provide cooking classes to
students
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.
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, few believe that
this
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 type of class will affect the
overall
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 learning capacity of
students
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 and waste vital learning time. I believe it is an essential life skill and should be a part of the
school
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 curriculum. It is believed that cooking , being an essential life skill, should be taught in
school
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. Nowadays, people travel for work , and
students
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 go to different cities for education , which results in bad eating habits as they don’t know how to cook, leading to poor health.
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, if a person knows how to prepare his own food will help him to prepare healthy meals.
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, the University of Waterloo recently did a study, showing that
students
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 who learnt meal preparation and cooking have 35% less stress and have higher health ratios.
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, it is argued that adding an additional subject will negatively affect
overall
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 learning time. Usually, it is expected of schools that children will learn core subjects. If children start learning cooking skills as part of their regular curriculum, it will reduce the time available for important subjects because
school
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 hours are limited.
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, A recent survey done in one of the Peel region schools, evidently shows that adding an extra learning activity reduces children’s attendance 25%
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 of added stress. In conclusion, there are extreme opposite views when it comes to learning cooking. I believe it is completely vital to learn cooking as it helps to be independent , and when it is taught in
school
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, it helps children to learn it hassle-free.

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coherence
In each part, stick to one main idea and link it to the question with a clear bridge word.
coherence
Work on making links between sentences smoother and fix long or run‑on sentences.
task response
Give more strong reasons and support them with clear, real examples. Check facts.
language
Reduce errors in grammar and punctuation to keep meaning clear.
content
Clear position on cooking in schools.
structure
Good structure with an intro, body and conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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