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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the different amounts of sales recorded at a small restaurant in a downtown business district in the
week
 of
october
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October
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 from the dates 7 to 13. The values are expressed in
dollars
.
Overall
, the earnings through selling food fluctuated throughout the
week
. Most revenue generated through lunch sales
were
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was
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 on
wednesday
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Wednesday
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whereas
 dinner on
friday
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Friday
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 clocked
highest
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the highest
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 income and
sunday
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Sunday
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 was the day of least earning for both
the
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apply
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meals. Sales of lunch at a small restaurant on
monday
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Monday
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 rounded off at 2,400
dollars
,
this
 value rose marginally
till
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to
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 2,595
dollars
 by the
mid
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midweek
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week
. The earnings experienced a slight dip on the following day before rising up to 2,500
dollars
 on
friday
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Friday
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.
After
this
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this,
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 the income fell dramatically crashing at 1,550
dollars
 by the end of the
week
. Income generated by selling dinner meals started off by earning 3,623
dollars
 on the first
week day
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weekday
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,
this
 value fluctuated over the span of three days before clocking up at
staggering4,350
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a staggering 4,350
dollars
 on
friday
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Friday
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. The revenue fell drastically on the weekends
finally
 settling up at 2,450
dollars
 on
sunday
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Sunday
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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