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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that it is best for
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children
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 development having
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independet
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independent
school
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while
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 others believe that going to
school
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 is essential for them. I tend to think
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the ideas
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ideas
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it
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 own benefits which will be
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 more
on
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 the following paragraph. On the one hand, some people hold a view that they tend to teach their
student
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students
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 independently at home in order to monitor their progress directly.
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 is because they might
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 if their
children
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 associate with
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school
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 friends and easily imitate their bad behaviour. One of my
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teachers
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for example
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, despite
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children
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 to
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,
he
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provide
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 materials and let them join online
class
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classes
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 from home until they
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 from elementary
school
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.
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Generally
, people believe that even if they do not attend regular
school
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 their
children
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 still shows
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 result and can compete with those who learn
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directly
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school
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,
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also
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 think that as long as they are provided with similar material it is fine to let them study from home.
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, bringing
children
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 to attend class will be a better option
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for having
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 direct
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experience
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learning
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 with their friends.
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mean
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 they could learn how to maintain
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their attitude
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 and socialise with other people from
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an
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 early age. Each
schools
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school
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 have
their
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its
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 own
spesific
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specific
 terms
in
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 teaching method and developing characters, take Catholic schools
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 they have
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it mandatory
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 to pray before and after class.
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 is how they can learn to obey and follow the
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 particularly
they
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if they
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 know how to pray.
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,
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hold
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 a key factor in
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children
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children's
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 development.
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,
whereever
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wherever
children
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 learn, as long as they are
tought
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taught
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 right method they will show better
result
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results
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.
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 learning in
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school
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 or private can be
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a better
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 option for them.

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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear position in the introduction and a clear conclusion at the end of the essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your ideas.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more precise words to convey your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to verb tenses and sentence structures to ensure grammatical accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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