The average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of this and suggest some remedies to solve the problem.
With the increase in
obesity
amongst
individuals , the rate of health and well-being has decreased. Change preposition
among
This
essay will analyse the reasons causing this
problem and provide some plausible solutions in the forthcoming paragraphs with some relevant examples.
The two main causes are sedentary
lifestyle and poor eating habits. Correct article usage
a sedentary
In other words
, people not only sit for prolonged hours but they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
do not take part in any kind of physical activity. For example
, workers, who do desk jobs, hardly have physical movement throughout the day. Moreover
, they do not pay attention to their eating habits because of their hectic work schedule , they tend to eat which available quickly. To give an example, during lunch breaks , employees mostly eat Burgers or Pizzas as these foods are readily available. However
, saving time also
costs their health since these foods make people fat. Thus
, inactivity and junk food are two main factors that cause obesity
.
There are two possible remedial actions that can rectify this
problem. Firstly
, employers should make it mandatory to take 10 minutes stretching break after every 2 hour
sitting period. Add a hyphen
2-hour
This
means more healthy workers with more focus at work. In addition
to that, folks should replace their fast food with healthy meals. Though eating healthy and then
sticking to that kind of diet needs a firm motivation, it proves to be fruitful in long
run. Correct article usage
the long
This
can be done be
treating yourself Correct your spelling
by
your
favourite thing once you complete a new workout challenge. Change preposition
to your
For instance
, gifting yourself new
pair of running shoes once you complete 25 kilometeres running challenge. Correct article usage
a new
As a result
, obesity
will no longer be a problem if regualr
exercise and Correct your spelling
regular
proper
diet Correct article usage
a proper
is
included in daily life.
Change the verb form
are
To conclude
, undoubtedly obesity
has become one of the biggest issue
in the world nowadays. The main culprits are processed food and lack of exercise but Change to a plural noun
issues
this
can be solved if we eat balanced
diet and do workouts regularly.Add an article
a balanced
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