The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie chart illustrates the number of people who were using a variety of
languages
online. The table gives information about the average number of people online each year. Overall
,
The number of people online increased gradually, and more society preferred English to other languages
.
The amount of population who use the Internet grew each year from 1997 to 2001. It stood at 76 in 1997, and the figure doubled in the next year to 147. In 1999, it increased moderately to 195. After that, it climbed to 368,
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then
reached a peak of 513 in 2001.
Next,
we look at the languages
chosen by this
population in 2001. English was the highest representing 43%. Then
, it was followed by Japanese (8.9%), Chinese (8.8%), German (6.8%), and Spanish (6.5%) , while
Korean, Italian, French and Portuguese had very small numbers under 5%. Lastly
, Dutch is the lowest with 2.1% of users and the other unidentified languages
got 10%.Submitted by erniwbs on
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