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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given diagram delineates the information regarding the reproduction and growth of the
honey
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 bee. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that six steps are required for the formation of matured
honey
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 bees during the life cycle of 34 to 36
days
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. Every three
days
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, female
honey
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 bees lay about 1 or 2 eggs. These eggs are hatched after 9 to 10
days
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. After hatching, more
five
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than five
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days
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 are required for an infant
honey
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 bee will be released. Next 7
days
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, the size of an infant will be increased. Succeeding 3
days
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, the nymph moults will be grown 3 times. After 9
days
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, the young adult emerges. These young adult takes four
days
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 to
get
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apply
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mature and form
a mature bees
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a mature bee
mature bees
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, which again will produce one or two eggs
in
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apply
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every three
days
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.
For
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this
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 reason, 34 to 36
days
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are
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is
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 the total number of
days
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 required by
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honey
Add an article
a honey
the honey
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 bee to complete its cycle related to production and growth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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