Some people think it is better to spend and enjoy their money once they earn it. Others think it is better to save their money and enjoy it in the future. Which stand do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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some people argue that once they earn their salaries, they have every

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to spend whatever it takes,

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, others do not agree and counter the statement by saying that saving would be a wiser choice. Personally, if I had to give an answer, I would choose to put money in my

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account for future enjoyment.

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only it

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me to prevent any unexpected event, but

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creating

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yields for my fortune.

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with, anything can happen unexcitingly, and money is a tool to help you at any

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, accidents

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as car accidents, short in paying rents, forgetful taxes, broken indoor equipment... can be quite a pain in the neck for you if you do not have a second plan.

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, when making

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for saving not only

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users need to

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forward

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events but

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room for rather positive events

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as meeting with old friends, eating out,...

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, if the plan is sufficient enough,

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can expect quite a decent amount of yields. There are countless

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the method

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of saving up

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as investing,

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out there and it is up to

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owner to choose whichever method to help them gain returns from their investment.

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it takes time and bravery as many people can stumble across risks and

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, along their

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, their dedication would be returned with a bountiful harvest.

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, at

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the concept of trading stocks

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alien to lots of

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, but

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it has been one of the best

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making

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yields from their savings. In conclusion, it is

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beneficial with the idea of making

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instead

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of spending all the salaries, as not only it

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to counter some accidents but

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it helps to build up one's fortune along the way

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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311 words

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