The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart
represents
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shows
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the four kinds of sports
taken
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that took
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part
by
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in
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number
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a number
the number
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of
people
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between 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, the different kinds of sports activities include
,
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apply
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Basketball, Tennis, Badminton and
Rugby
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. In 1985, 50
people
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choose
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chose
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badminton and the flow was in the same line till 2005. Basketball was around 55% of
people
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and maintained the same flow as same as
the
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apply
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Badminton. Tennis was played by 150
people
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in the
year
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1985 and was gradually increased to 210
member
Change to a plural noun
members
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by the
year
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2005.
Rugby
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was ranging from 250
andthere
Correct your spelling
and there
was
drastic
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drastically
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decreased to 50% of the
people
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by the time it reached
to
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apply
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2005.
Therefore
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,
Rugby
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was the maximum amount of
people
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Correct pronoun usage
who choose
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choose
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chose
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to play in the
year
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1985 and It was
also
Linking Words
the same sport that was
least
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the least
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taken part
by
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in
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the number of
people
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in 2005. Tennis and
Rugby
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maintains
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maintain
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the same number that
takes
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took
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part in playing during the
year
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1995 by 200
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, rugby, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • stable
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • significant change
  • regional popularity
  • time period
  • sports activities
  • data representation
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