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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should spend on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

Space
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 research costs millions of dollars yearly. It is debated that improving living standards on Earth is more worth investing
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 The writer disagrees with the above view and will explain the reasons in
this
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 essay. The most important reason for discovering
space
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 is that it can help us
predicting
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 and
preventing
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 potential
space
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problems
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.
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, the
sun
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 radiation is higher than normal because of activities in its core, causing more health
problems
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 or extreme
weathers
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weather
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 on the Earth. Movements of other stars and planets can
also
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 affect our life
condition
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conditions
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 as well.
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, provided that we are
be
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conscious and calculate when and how
problems
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 can happen, we can prepare long-term solutions to cope with
problems
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. In the other way, researching
space
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 is a necessary action to save our life.
The another
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 reason is that we can
using
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outspace
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outpace
out space
 natural resources.
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 renewable energies are being used nowadays, we still rely on some materials which are running out
of
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like
steels
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steel
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 and even fossil fuels
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 the growing population is requiring more basic needs, so an energy crisis can occur. Investing
on
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 exploring spaces can find potential natural resources on other planets and deliver them back
on
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 Earth.
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, we not only save our environment but
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ensuring
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 the human-enhanced process. In conclusion,
human
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humans
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 should
spent
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 more expenditures on
space
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 research to make valuable predictions
as well as
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 finding sources of materials and energies on other planets.
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 advantage could enhance
live
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 standards and preserve the Earth’s environment in the future.

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task response
The essay does not fully address the opposing view and does not present a counter-argument. It is important to acknowledge the opposing view and provide a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which provide a good overview of the main points. However, it would be beneficial to mention the opposing view and provide a thesis statement.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and the use of appropriate academic words. However, there are a few instances where sentences could be more concise and precise.
grammatical range
Overall, the essay shows good control of grammar with few errors. However, there are some instances where sentence structures could be more varied to enhance the writing.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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