Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should spend on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?
Space
research costs millions of dollars yearly. It is debated that improving living standards on Earth is more worth investing.
The writer disagrees with the above view and will explain the reasons in Change preposition
in.
this
essay.
The most important reason for discovering space
is that it can help us predicting
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predict
preventing
potential Wrong verb form
prevent
space
problems
. For instance
, the sun
radiation is higher than normal because of activities in its core, causing more health Change noun form
sun's
problems
or extreme weathers
on the Earth. Movements of other stars and planets can Fix the agreement mistake
weather
also
affect our life condition
as well. Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
Hence
, provided that we are be
conscious and calculate when and how Unnecessary verb
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problems
can happen, we can prepare long-term solutions to cope with problems
. In the other way, researching space
is a necessary action to save our life.
The another
reason is that we can Remove the article
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using
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use
be using
outspace
natural resources. Correct your spelling
outpace
out space
Although
renewable energies are being used nowadays, we still rely on some materials which are running out of
like Change preposition
apply
steels
and even fossil fuels Fix the agreement mistake
steel
while
the growing population is requiring more basic needs, so an energy crisis can occur. Investing on
exploring spaces can find potential natural resources on other planets and deliver them back Change preposition
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on
Earth. Change preposition
to
Consequently
, we not only save our environment but also
ensuring
the human-enhanced process.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
ensure
human
should Fix the agreement mistake
humans
spent
more expenditures on Change the verb form
spend
space
research to make valuable predictions as well as
finding sources of materials and energies on other planets. This
advantage could enhance live
standards and preserve the Earth’s environment in the future.Replace the word
living
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task response
The essay does not fully address the opposing view and does not present a counter-argument. It is important to acknowledge the opposing view and provide a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which provide a good overview of the main points. However, it would be beneficial to mention the opposing view and provide a thesis statement.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and the use of appropriate academic words. However, there are a few instances where sentences could be more concise and precise.
grammatical range
Overall, the essay shows good control of grammar with few errors. However, there are some instances where sentence structures could be more varied to enhance the writing.
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