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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the cause of this? How can this problem be solved?

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In an up-coming world
the
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overcrowded
cities
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 appear as the main issue
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 nations.
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 essay will examine the main causes of
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 tendency and possible solutions to
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 problem. The major cause is the lack of job offers in rural areas and small
cities
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, which makes citizens relocate
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 an absence of job opportunities related to an unpopular degree as a game designer.
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this
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 fact, the population of the human settlement has
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been
 decreasing over the years, approaching zero. The second cause is the poor infrastructure
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 old schools and sports facilities.
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, people do not have any options to go out and spend time with their kids in well-developed playgrounds or well-stocked parks.
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, the living standard is much lower than in the edge-catching
cities
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 for society
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 as theatre, cinema and local cafes. The suitable solution will be a reconstruction of existing infrastructure and modernisation of the
cities
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 which are far from the major urban ones. With the appearance of diverse places for leisure, people will not be able to get out of the city.
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, the edifice of the shopping mall may attract individuals
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 numerous cafes and shops, thanks to which the city is becoming enlivened.
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, the appearance of shops is creating job offers for all generations, thanks to which there is no necessity to move away in order to earn money. The purveyed city by modern schools and educational centres helps local students not
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 forced to go abroad. Being capable of getting a high-quality education, they will
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 be able to improve their hometown.
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, the overpopulation has occurred because of the run-down small
cities
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.
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, the refurbishment of them can suspend the people’s relocation.
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