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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? You should write at least 250 words.

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I agree with
this
 statement,
however
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 it is as important to identify and select students who are pursuing a
knowldge
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knowledge
 in the university and not for the sake of getting a degree. Government support should be available to students with limited financial ability or
has
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who have
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 prestigious academic achievements.
This
 will allow students to strive for academic excellence
and
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apply
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focus on knowledge
pursue
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and remove concerns
on
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 financial issues. Allow the country to be more prosperous as talented individuals gain access to knowledge.
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task response
While you agree with the statement, you need to provide a more balanced view by addressing possible counterarguments. Additionally, it is important to clearly state your stance in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear logical structure. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and support your main points. Make sure to use appropriate linking words to connect your ideas.
lexical resource
While your use of vocabulary is adequate, try to incorporate more varied and advanced vocabulary to demonstrate a wider range of language skills.
grammatical range
Although your grammar is generally accurate, try to use a wider range of grammatical structures and complex sentences to showcase your language proficiency.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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