In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. ‎Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?‎

In
contemporary
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era, fast
food
is becoming more and more popular,
besides
, it is becoming less expensive than in the past. that's why more
pepole
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people
prefer to buy
this
type of available
food
instead
of preparing meals which may demand a lot
off
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of
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effort and
time
. I think that the drawbacks of the former type of
food
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much less
then
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than
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the advantages and one should not abuse it. Recently, many of us
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realy
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really
hard and for a long
time
during the day so that we don't even have
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time
to think about our meals, and when we are starving
hungry
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and hungry
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at
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the middle of the day, the
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thing to do is to order a
take away
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meal.
That
is
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realy
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really
dosen't
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doesn't
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cost a lot of money and is not
time consuming
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. But we should always remember that it is much less healthy than
food
that we invest in and cook by
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ourselves
and to be honest, it
is
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also
costs less than the one that we buy.
For example
, if you decide to cook by yourself, you will pay attention to the
nutritions
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that your meal includes, to the way you prepare it and sometimes to how it looks, and try to
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emphasise
emphasize
that it
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be totally nutritional balanced.
On the other hand
, one may abuse fast
food
because you can get it really rapidly and you can choose between the different
availabe
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available
cuisines, and it is
realy
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really
delicious. So why not
to
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do that?
Besides
to
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the health issue, I think that preparing meals is very important socially.
For instance
, when the
mothers
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mother
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returns from work, it would be enjoyable to make
food
with her children,
at
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the end, all family members
set
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in the dining room and eat together thing
that
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which
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would make them feel much
more close
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closer
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and beloved.
To conclude
,
inspite
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in spite
of the fact that dining with
fast-
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fast food
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food
may be the
eassy
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easy
way to
do
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, I think
the
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it has a lot of disadvantages that may
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negatively our daily
life
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.
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