The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.

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world

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which are North

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, Central and Eastern Europe, South-East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa and South

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. Years are measured in 5-year intervals and numbers are measured in

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, the number of tourist arrivals

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increasing for 15 years in most countries except North

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. In 1990, 70

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people visited

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North

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increased

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in 2000. In 2005, the number of people decreased slightly to 85

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. In Central and Eastern Europe, between 1990 and 1995, the number of tourists skyrocketed from 30

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to 60

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increased marginally to 62

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and rose dramatically to 90

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. In South-East Asia, it went up gradually from 20

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in 1990 to 30

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in 2000,

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increased sharply to 50

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. Sub-Saharan Africa and South

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almost

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trend in 1990 and 1995 showed a small increase,

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in Sub-Saharan Africa, it

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slightly larger than South

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. The biggest change was Central and

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Europe, beginning with 30

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and ending up with 90

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. South

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America

showed the smallest change which was roughly 3

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for 15 years.

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