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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.
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This
 graph illustrates international tourist arrivals from 1990 to 2005 in five different parts of
world
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the world
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 which are North
America
, Central and Eastern Europe, South-East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
. Years are measured in 5-year intervals and numbers are measured in
millions
.
Overall
, the number of tourist arrivals
were
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has been
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 increasing for 15 years in most countries except North
America
. In 1990, 70
millions
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million
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of
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people visited
in
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North
America
,
then
 increased
20
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to 20
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millions
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million
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 in 2000. In 2005, the number of people decreased slightly to 85
millions
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million
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. In Central and Eastern Europe, between 1990 and 1995, the number of tourists skyrocketed from 30
millions
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million
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 to 60
millions
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million
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,
then
 increased marginally to 62
millions
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million
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 and rose dramatically to 90
millions
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million
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. In South-East Asia, it went up gradually from 20
millions
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million
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 in 1990 to 30
millions
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million
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 in 2000,
then
 increased sharply to 50
millions
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million
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. Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
have
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almost
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an almost
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same
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the same
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 trend in 1990 and 1995 showed a small increase,
then
 in Sub-Saharan Africa, it
grow
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 slightly larger than South
Ameria
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America
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. The biggest change was Central and
Easter
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Eastern
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 Europe, beginning with 30
millions
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million
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 and ending up with 90
millions
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million
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. South
Americe
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America
 showed the smallest change which was roughly 3
millions
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million
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 for 15 years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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