The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not . Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not . Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The graph illustrates the comparison of Gross Domestic Product (GDP) growth between the wealthy countries, the
globalisers
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globalists
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, and the
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non-globalisers
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non-globalised
in
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1960 until 1990.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the globalisers experienced a gradual positive growth.
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contrary
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, the wealthy countries had a downward trend,
while
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the
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remained unstable. In 1990, the
globalisers
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globalised
globalists
rose steadily and reached
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peak with approximately 5% of GDP growth, marking
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the highest point across the years. As opposed to that, the wealthy countries began with almost 5%, yet it fell drastically in 1970 to around 3% and continue to decrease until 2% in 1990.
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, the
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had a different pattern. In 1960, the
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started with approximately 2,5% and rose to over 3%.
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, it fell dramatically in 1980 and accounted
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1%,
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the lowest point across the four periods. It started to grow again in 1990 and reached around 1,5%, but its progress
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considered as a small achievement compared to others.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words non-globalisers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • economic growth
  • global approach to business
  • non-global countries
  • wealthy countries
  • trend
  • growth rate
  • domestic products
  • globalization
  • international trade
  • economic maturity
  • stable economy
  • consistently
  • key factors
  • comparison
  • benefits
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