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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the most significant of these problems? How can these problems be tackled

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People
 who live in big cities have to deal with a range of
problems
 in their daily
life
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lives
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. The most crucial of these
problems
 are
crime
 and pollution. These
problems
 can be partly solved by the government being more strict in city rules.
Crime
 is one of the biggest
problems
 in the city.
According to
 recent statistics, the rate of
crime
 in urban areas increased dramatically compared to several years before. More and more types of criminals
such
 as thieves, murderers... It makes life in big cities much more complicated.
Other
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Another
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 problem of cities is pollution. The reason
of
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for
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this
 problem is
people
, a lot of
people
 lack
of
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awareness of the vital role that the
environment
 plays, they waste a lot and their action increases their carbon footprint.
Moreover
,
people
also
 destroy the
environment
 by cutting down trees,
destroying
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 forests to build houses and apartments.
Therefore
,
people
 is why the pollution increases time by time. There are some methods to tackle these
problems
.
Firstly
, the government should apply the more strict punishment for criminals, it can reduce the rate of
crime
 in urban areas.
Secondly
, there should be a more strict
rule
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rules
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 for protecting the
environment
 for everyone,
the
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apply
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global warming is the result of disrespect to the
environment
.
Finally
, each person must become aware of protecting the city safety and the
environment
,
do
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not litter and planting more trees. In conclusion, the citizens
are suffered
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suffer
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 from a lot of
problems
 in their daily
life
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lives
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.
Nonetheless
, it can be solved by the government and each person's awareness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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