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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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pie charts demonstrate the
whole
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money
has been
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paid by the USA
children’s
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Children’s
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charity
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 in 2016 and compare it with its income.
Overall
, by a glance at these data, it is regarded that almost their purchases were equal to their revenue;
also
, they have made a minor profit. Regarding their monetary source,
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dominate
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 part of their money has been earned by donating food, nearly three-quarters of
entire
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. In comparison, the least fraction was owned by the government and investments
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were exactly the same; less than one
percent
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.
Furthermore
, the role of program revenue was
negligiable
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negligible
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 approximately 2%. Back to the expenditure chart , their money has been spent only on three main purposes including program services, fundraising, management and general. In more detail, the most paying out was on the program services
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 were roughly 96%.
Also
, fundraising was
in
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the second priority with a tiny difference in
copamrison
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comparison
 with general spending.
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