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people who live in lagre cities face a range of problems in their daily life

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Nowadays,many
residents
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 need to deal with a range of problems in their daily
life
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.The reason which causes these problems can begin to inhabitants s moral, habits attitude show in their daily life.These issues can be tackled when
people
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 who live in urban areas have some disciplines in their lives and improve their
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 of
pollution
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 The underlying root of the issue is
air
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pollution
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 which is known to pour from factories cars and motorbikes.Not at all , the fire which is made from lack of
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 s
residents
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 cause more carbon dioxide and some poisonous gases these substances have a negative effect on our health.
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,
air
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pollution
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 brings diseases to the health of inhabitants
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 as sickness of the lung,heart disease and more.
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 is true in many countries the scale of patients who have diseases from
air
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pollution
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 is increasing Another factor may be
people
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 who live in large cities lack
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knowledge
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 to understand the harmful of
air
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pollution
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.In other words,many
residents
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 in urban areas do not care and protect the environment.These things
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evident that some
people
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 will litter and make fire depending on their feelings about what they want not only their desire to do
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 their selfishness.
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, all of these situations can bring us a number of pollutions , particularly
air
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pollution
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 ,
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 they will pay for their responsibility through their health and their environmental habits.
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 will be true when many
people
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 need to change their accommodations when
air
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pollution
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 happens Perhaps a solution to the problem of
air
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pollution
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 is that the government need to have some discipline and educate young
people
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 about the harmful of
air
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pollution
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 .
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 can give
residents
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 enough
knowledge
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 to understand what they need to do .
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 situation leads to ensure
people
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 have solutions to cope with
air
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pollution
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 as going by public transport to reduce emissions In conclusion, being responsible and obeying the rules will solve every issue for
residents
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 in urban areas

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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