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The graph below shows the sales of children's books ,adult fiction and education books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children's books ,adult fiction and education books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
books
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 sold in three different categories for a period of 4 years starting from 2002. As can be seen from the graph, the number of
books
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 sold for children saw a significant rise between 2002 and 2006
while
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 the other two categories of adult fiction and educational
books
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 observed their
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 in
sales
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 numbers. The
sales
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 of children's
books
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 started at nearly 32
million
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dollars
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 and grew steadily until
it
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 reached
its
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 highest peak at more than 55
million
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dollars
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 by the year
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2006.
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, the
sales
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 of adult fiction fluctuated with a downward trend until it reached the lowest point at 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2006. Meanwhile, the number of
books
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 sold for educational purposes saw the opposite pattern when it varied with an upward trend during the period before it reached the highest point of
sales
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 at approximately 31
million
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dollars
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 in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, sales, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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