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Nowadays, one of the widely discussed problems are about traffic jams. What we should to minimise this problem? This essay will discuss about it.

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Nowadays, one of the widely discussed problems are about traffic jams. What we should to minimise
this
 problem?
This
 essay will discuss about it. There are lots of ways for fix that. At
firstly
, we must think about how the
traffics
 become? Of course, from the huge
number
 of
people
, who live at small place. It is kind of urbanisation.
Therefore
, we should Increase
number
 of places for living.
For instance
, increase life expectancy In towns.
this
 actions will lead to moving
people
 from city to villages and achieve our goal reduce urbanisation.
This
 way is kind of society
level
. For individual
level
, we are able to change the amount for tax. Like, rise the taxes for owning a vehicle: car, motorbike etc. Because, one of the fundamental reason for becoming any
traffics
 a great
number
 of that,
consequently
, the
number
 of vehicles will fall
due to
this
 factor. So, we are able to reduce
number
 of
traffics
 via manage the car. For both levels, we can solve it just by do the
roads
 in significant place - more wider. Because, the
traffics
 often become in places where too many
people
. There is
also
, will lack of place for move in the road. So the
traffics
 jams becoming in
such
 ways. Our govoernment should do
roads
 more wider for reduce that. To make an conclusion, it will said that we have three key factors for becoming some
traffics
 : urbanisation, too many cars in owning of
people
 and just not be wide
roads
 in major places. Every factor has own
level
 of solving. [19:18, 31.10.2023] +7 775 666 1948: traffic on
roads
 has become a problem in nearly every country in the world. What can be done to reduce the amount of traffic at a society
level
 and at an individual
level
?
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