IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or She always has parties and friends visiting. write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the roommate.

#room #student #college #hostel #study #parties #friends #warden #displeasure #roommate
Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about my roommate I am Alex I live in room number 456 I am extremely annoyed by the behavior of my roommate which does not allow me to focus on my studies. She is a student and a teacher and she is in her first year in college, I am a senior and I am studying marketing. She always listens to loud music and movies at night
moreover
, she invites her friends to our room they make a noise and interrupt me with questions in
this
 situation I am not able to concentrate on my studies. I requested her many times to be more polite and not bring your friends to our room she ignored my request and she increased her noise more than before I am very disappointed with her carelessness. I would like to request you to come up with a solution immediately as I am in my final year in college I am working on increasing my score I am losing my study skills
due to
 her inappropriate
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
. Yours faithfully. Alex
Submitted by luhana.chii on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear logical structure, with an appropriate introduction, development of the problem, and a conclusion or request for a specific action.
coherence cohesion
Use a proper salutation and closing in formal letters. For instance, use 'Dear Warden' instead of 'Dear Mr. Smith' when addressing a position rather than a person, and end with a formal closing such as 'Yours sincerely' followed by your full name.
coherence cohesion
Divide the letter into clear paragraphs, each containing a single idea or point. Ensure that the transition between paragraphs is smooth and logical.
task achievement
Address all components of the prompt effectively, providing enough detail about the specific issues caused by the roommate, and how they impact your studies.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter. Avoid using informal language and ensure to keep the language respectful.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: