The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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the stages of how carbonate drinks
is
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are
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made.
Overall
, there are five stages starting from
water
cleaning until
package
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the package
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to delivered to supermakets.
According to
the picture, the process
begin
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begins
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with filtering raw
water
to make it clear
then
delivered
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delivers
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it into
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into
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to
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the
water
softener tank. Chemicals
also
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are also
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used in that media to make the
water
soften and
then
sent through the pump to electric heaters.
This
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In this
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second stage, electric heaters make the
water
heat and evaporate
whereas
delivered with
cooling
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a cooling
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pipe into separate media experiencing
carbonation
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a carbonation
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process.
Furthermore
, after
mixed
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mixing
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with carbon dioxide the main material
run
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runs
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through a pipe which directly
connect
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connects
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with
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to
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mixing
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the mixing
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tank, which is in
this
stage divided
by
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into
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3 main
task
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tasks
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such
as colouring,
create
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creating
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syruo
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syrup
and
add
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adding
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flavour. Afterwards, it passed another filter to
filtering
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filter
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and
filling
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fill
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the bottles and cans. After
all
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all,
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bottles
filled
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are filled
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, the
last
proces
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process
is
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a package
the package
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package
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packaged
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to sell in
supermakets
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supermarkets
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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