Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?
Nowadays, it has proved that the sport has beneficial effects on society’s health, and governments focus on
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Possibly the main cause might be that people’s incomes decrease after retirement, so they struggle with financial crises. Change preposition
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, retirees cannot pay sports club fees, because their lifestyles have high costs and typically gyms are not easy to reach for them. Linking Words
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, another cause might be older ages do not believe advantages of exercise and they claim that sport is an amusement for youth. So, they think training could not be a relevant treatment for their body pains and provoke them from sickness, and they replace home remedies to cure their pains.
Turning to possible solutions, the government can encourage older people to exercise by assigning a massive budget to them. It means that states could build great gyms downtown and in remote areas. Linking Words
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, the government can provide sports equipment at the parks and residential regions. Linking Words
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, officials might inspire by claiming if pensioners do work out, states will decrease their tax and medical insurance charges. Linking Words
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, in some countries, insurance companies employ special trainers to train old ages at sports clubs without paying money, in order to prevent them from Linking Words
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In conclusion, financial obstacles, and older people's beliefs seem to be the main causes, and a reduction in medical insurance and suitable instruments would be reasonable remedies.Verb problem
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