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Nowadays, a growing number of people with help problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

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Prevention is better than cure and getting treatment early before it worse. these days, a plethora of people do not meet their own medical officer to get the various conditions of diseases and they use other tricks to cure them.
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 they get their own drugs. without any correct
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 it will be harmful to the human body and sometimes without the correct drug at to correct time and correct place ( nasal spray,ear drops ) it can be
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 some of in society get drugs from a doctor and he or she prescribes those tablets for any other person who has similar symptoms. sometimes it may reduce his or her illness and if it
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 by those she does thanks and if it does not happen the problem may be great. We can not take the risk of another person's life
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 we act against ethics and the court has the ability to make us guilty. because of that, we should in interfere those cases. In conclusion, If we want to recover speedily without side effects, We should go to a doctor before doing any other alternatives, Because some recovery methods given by society are very hard and sometimes doctors have to delay in diagnosing
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task response
Your essay lacks a clear answer to the question. The prompt asks whether the trend of using alternative medicines is positive or negative, but your essay does not provide a clear stance. It is important to clearly state your position in the introduction and support it throughout the essay.
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Your essay lacks a clear overall structure. Make sure to include an introduction with a thesis statement, body paragraphs with supporting arguments, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
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The vocabulary in your essay is limited and lacks variety. Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.
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There are several grammatical errors throughout your essay. Make sure to review your grammar and sentence structure to improve the overall quality of your writing.

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