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he given tables show the amount of money earned by five European countries by selling Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in the years 1994 and 2004.

he given tables show the amount of money earned by five European countries by selling Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in the years 1994 and 2004.
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The tables display the sales return in the
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, Switzerland , Denmark, Belgium and
Sweden
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 from the sale of two products in 1994 and 2004.
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, it can be deduced that the income generated by most countries rose significantly in both years but the same cannot be said about Belgium and
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 as there was a slight decrease in banana trade in both years. Between 1999 and 2004, the coffee market in the
Uk
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 experienced quite a boom with as there was 20
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 more euros generated
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 was followed by Switzerland at sales worth 6
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 in 2004 .
Sweden
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 made the least profit in 1999 and 2004 at less than a
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 euros and 1
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 euros respectively.
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 the
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 maintained
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 position as owning the largest banana market in 1999 and 2004 at 15
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 and 47,000000 respectively. In the same way,
Sweden
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maintained
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recorded the lowest amount in 2004 at less than a
million
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 but in 1999, Denmark recorded just less than a
million
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 even lower than the money generated by
Sweden
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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