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Millions of dollars are spent on spce research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standard on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Exploring
space
 is a common topic in society in the state-of-the-art era.
However
, it is often argued that enormous expenditure should be spent on upgrading
the
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living standards rather than researching the universe. From my point of view, I totally agree with
this
 concept that living conditions need to be more notice There are too many problems that need to be resolved. One of the
most
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 problems is global warming. So why
some
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 opinions suppose the
money
 should be spent on improving the quality of life
.
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 Global warming or transport facilities are one of the obvious increases in the poverty rate in the world.
For example
, each year many countries are destroyed by floods,
hurricanes
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.
Therefore
money
 needs to be offset for them and rehabilitate back original.
On the other hand
, sometimes scientists do research or
space
 is not important but the
money
 that they spend is too big and we don't receive much about it. We need to deal with the problems of
space
 that
Space
 need a lot of
money
 to deal with but we don't have
money
 to spend on it. What we need to pay less for the research and spend on the sound An example of
this
 is nowadays there are many poor people that need help and clot of construction that need to be built but the meid don't spend
money
 for it but the government
mest
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must
 Spend a lot of
money
 for exploring the
space
. To summarize the people's ambitions are well-founded, but it is still harder because the knowledge is not enough.
However
, improving living run-of-the-mill on Earth can help find talent and it makes distance research more easier. I personally believe that
money
 should be spent on improvements in order to maintain and improve the happiness of Earth's life.

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