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Millions of dollars are spent on spce research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standard on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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 is a common topic in society in the state-of-the-art era.
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, it is often argued that enormous expenditure should be spent on upgrading
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living standards rather than researching the universe. From my point of view, I totally agree with
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 concept that living conditions need to be more notice There are too many problems that need to be resolved. One of the
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 problems is global warming. So why
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 opinions suppose the
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 should be spent on improving the quality of life
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 Global warming or transport facilities are one of the obvious increases in the poverty rate in the world.
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, each year many countries are destroyed by floods,
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 needs to be offset for them and rehabilitate back original.
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, sometimes scientists do research or
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 is not important but the
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 that they spend is too big and we don't receive much about it. We need to deal with the problems of
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 need a lot of
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 to deal with but we don't have
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 to spend on it. What we need to pay less for the research and spend on the sound An example of
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 is nowadays there are many poor people that need help and clot of construction that need to be built but the meid don't spend
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 for it but the government
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 for exploring the
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. To summarize the people's ambitions are well-founded, but it is still harder because the knowledge is not enough.
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, improving living run-of-the-mill on Earth can help find talent and it makes distance research more easier. I personally believe that
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 should be spent on improvements in order to maintain and improve the happiness of Earth's life.
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