The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008.

The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008.
The line graph illustrates how much money was allocated for 4 different majors by the US government from 1980 to 2008.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the expenditure on health was the highest
while
the reverse was true for general science,
while
all majors witnessed a fluctuation over the
period
. In detail, starting at 8
billion
in 1980 the figure for Heath surged to reach a peak at 22
billion
in 2004, before falling to under 19
billion
in 2008.
While
the expenditure of the US government for Space increased slightly from over 5
billion
to under 10
billion
between 2980 and 2008, a similar trend was seen in the figure for general science that went up gradually by 2.5
billion
to reach 5
billion
at the end
of the
period
. There was a
period
of stability experienced in the amount of money allocated for energy between 1980 and 1992
then
this
figure fluctuated around 5
billion
and 7
billion
.
In addition
, the US government spent
their
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budget on the other was drop over the
period
which started at 7.5
billion
and
at the end
of
the
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period
was
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5
billion
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • funding levels
  • government expenditure
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • inflation-adjusted dollars
  • historic highs/lows
  • research grants
  • public investment
  • financial resources
  • sector-specific spending
  • economic downturn
  • national priorities
  • scientific advancement
  • fiscal policy
  • economic stimulus
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