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Nowadays, more and more people prefer choosing online courses to learn than attending regular classes. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #courses #classes
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 the contemporary era, many people prefer to study via the net
instead
 of regular learning. Online courses have a lot of advantages but
also
 some drawbacks. I will elaborate on my perspective in the following paragraphs. On the
one
 hand,
time
 is money in
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recent days, that's why many people always think
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about how
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 to save
time
 and make their
life
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 less complicated.
For example
, when
one
 chooses to study online, he or she would do that in order to save
time
 and money, by
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 at home rather than going to the college via a bus or a car.
Furthermore
, sometimes you can choose the timing of the lesson so that you may work
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in
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 the morning and study
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 the evening thing
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 may help you feel more convenient financially. On the
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 hand,
the
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e-learning may have some disadvantages that
one
 can not ignore.
For instance
, the issue of focusing
along
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the
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time
. Some people find it difficult to concentrate in a lesson when you can not see the teacher face to face. Another
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important
 issue is the issue of cooperation and
comunication
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communication
 between the students and their
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 which may be
more close
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to
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 attending regular classes.
To conclude
, I think that each of the mentioned ways
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 negative and positive aspects, and
one
 should decide which
one
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suits
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 him or her depending on his or her
expectactions
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expectations
 from the specific type of education he or she is planning to get.
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task response
Ensure that you fully address the question in your essay. Some of your points are not directly related to the advantages and disadvantages of online courses.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the logical organization of your ideas. Some paragraphs lack clear topic sentences and transitions between points.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to demonstrate a higher level of lexical resource. Use more varied and precise vocabulary to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on improving the accuracy of your grammar. There are some errors in sentence structure and verb tense usage throughout the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preference
  • online courses
  • regular classes
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • accessibility
  • cost-effectiveness
  • convenience
  • learning from home
  • lack
  • face-to-face interaction
  • potential
  • distractions
  • limited
  • practical application
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