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39.The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

39.The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph displays the fluctuation of house prices in five cities, and a comparison between the years from 1990 to 1995 and 1996 to 2002 with the average price in 1989.
Overall
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, London had the largest
variation
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 in both periods compared with 1989. The other significant feature of
this
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 graph is that
Frankfurt
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 varied the least between 1996 and 2002. London and Tokyo had the same proportion of changes from 1990 to 1995, which was around -7,5%, followed by New
York
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 with 2,5% less, which was -5%.
While
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 Madrid and
Frankfurt
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, had positive changes,
Frankfurt
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 had a percentage of approximately 2.5%,
while
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 Madrid had the smallest
variation
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 in
this
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 period of time compared to the other cities, which was nearly 2%. From 1996 to 2002, London continued to have the largest
variation
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, with around 12%. New
York
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 and Tokyo had the same
variation
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 amount, but New
York
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 had a positive fluctuation,
while
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 Tokyo’s was negative, which were -5% and 5% respectively. Madrid just had 1% less than New
York
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, which was 4%, and
finally
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,
Frankfurt
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 had the smallest
variation
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 with just 1%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words variation, frankfurt, york with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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