The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The diagram compares the floor plan of a
library
at present time with 20 years ago.
Overall
, it is obvious that the
library
looks more modern and practical now, compared to the past.
Moreover
, there is no alteration in the outline of the
library
and external walls have remained just the same as
the
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past.
Firstly
, a new
room
has been dedicated to
the
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reference books which could be helpful for the students and did not exist in the past.
Furthermore
,
children's
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room
has
expanded
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now and
new
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sofa has been placed there for their convenience, which is accompanied with the
story telling
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events.
Computer
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room
has been displaced to the bottom left corner of the
library
which has facilitated its accessibility from the entrance door.
Besides
, chairs and the tables have been removed from the central part of the
library
which has made the internal
room
more specious .
However
, the
room
dedicated
for
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enquiry
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desk has been replaced with a new café which provides drinks and eating stuff for the students.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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