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Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on different factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Happiness
 is a state of mind and different people
understands
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 it in different ways. Some believe that a person’s level of
happiness
 directly correlates with their financial achievement.
However
, there are others who claim that several
factors
 can influence
happiness
. I believe that economic
success
do
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does
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 have a significant role in
happiness
 but other
factors
 are equally important as well. The main reason why people say economic
success
 is needed to achieve
happiness
 is because everyone needs
money
 to live their
life
 to the fullest.
For example
, we need
money
 if we want to live in a gorgeous apartment or have a nice house.
Furthermore
, we
also
 need
money
 if we want to get a car,
or
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wear fashionable clothes or even own
latest
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the latest
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 household
staffs essential
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staff essentials
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 for our
day to day
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day-to-day
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life
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lives
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. There’s no denying that all of
are
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these are
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 necessary for a happy
life
. Without
money
, as a matter of fact, a person will have to struggle even for the very basic needs of
life
 and cannot be happy.
On the other hand
, those who say that
happiness
 depends on other
factors
 give their reasons as follows.
Firstly
, having a good relationship with family members and loved ones
are
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is
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 needed to be happy.
For instance
, a person who has
barest
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the barest
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 minimum, but a very understanding family
members
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member
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 and
life
 partner can be very happy.
Likewise
, having
a
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good health is another factor necessary to be happy.
For instance
, a millionaire suffering from cancer can never be truly happy. I believe that
money
 is very important, but as long as the basic necessities of
life
 are not fulfilled.
Along with
money
, other
factors
plays
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play
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 a very important role
for
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in
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happiness
.
Money
 can buy medicines but not
bed
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beds
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. With
money
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money,
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 one can buy a bed but not sleep.
Happiness
 is
also
 a mental state. Those who are satisfied with what they have are really happy.
On the other hand
, there are no
limit
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limits
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 to economic
success
. Some people will always want more. In conclusion, both economic
success
 and other
factors
 as equally important for obtaining
happiness
. Ultimately, being happy is
mental
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a mental
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 state.
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