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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
Reading books creates a
skill-ful
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skilful
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to
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 the world. There is
a
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 argument, Someone thinks people who have a habit of reading can develop
great
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greater
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 imagination and
language
 proficiency than
who
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those who
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 watch television. In
this
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agreeing
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 with
this
 great idea. To commence with, reading
a
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any type of a book increases
the
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knowledge, attitudes, humility, skills and common
sence
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sense
 etc.We can divide books for various
categorisation
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due to
ingredians
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ingredients
ingredient
 of it .Not only
ingredians
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ingredients
 but
also
language
. A plethora of books, which are in
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 have old fairy tales. If we only read to love only mother
language
 editions it is a great harm, which is done by themselves. By the way,there are
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any
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 pictures in the novels without the cover. When we swim
though
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out
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the paragraph we can
imaginate
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imagine
any thing
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anything
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 regarding
to
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that
phrases
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. Indeed, We can love a number of fairy tales if we know the languages.
Lot
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 of countries have various stories and some stories are
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 bit change than
one
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to
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one nation. If we watch the television, it has
been
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reduced our thinking capacity because it shows and explains everything. For an instant, in the
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telegram
teledrama
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 we can watch and hear. So it
is not help
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 to develop our congenital abilities.
Moreover
, by watching cookery
program
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programs
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 we cannot
imaginate
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imagine
 the
recepy
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recipe
 for
make
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 that food after the program. If we have a
recepy
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recipe
 book, we can take the book and cook. In conclusion,
language
 and imagination are two common things, which have not to
this
 century youngest. Because they are addicted to technology. But by
increase
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ability
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the ability
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of
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to read
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reading
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reading,
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 we can deliver
a great persons
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a great person
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 to the nation who have
bi-
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a bi-language
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language
 or more and good knowledge about the imagination.
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