42.The table shows the number of people who took part in a national health survey between 2005 and 2008, answering questions about their sleeping habits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table displays information about the
men
and women
who answered a national well-being questionnaire about sleeping habits in the years 2005 to 2008.
Overall
, women
had participated in more surveys than men
, only in 2006, males took
part Wrong verb form
take
of
more studies than females. The other significant feature of the table is that Change preposition
in
by
the years, more people took part in surveys.
8,000 individuals took part Change preposition
over
of
a study about health care in 2005, but only 2,000 were Change preposition
in
men
, the other 6,000 were women
. In the next year, the total amount increased rapidly by 40,000 to 48,000, which
Change preposition
of which
one-forth
were females, and the rest 36,000 were male. In 2008 it rose sharply by almost 300,000, to 362,000, Correct your spelling
one-fourth
were
331,000 were Correct your spelling
where
women
and the rest 31,000 were men
.
During 2007 and 2009, the total number of people answering the study about sleeping habis
grew rapidly, and the number of Correct your spelling
habits
habit
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
who filled out the survey was equal. In 2007, there were 32,000 Fix the agreement mistake
females
women
and 32,000 men
who completed the questionnaire. Finally
in 2009, there were 540,000 answers, 270,000 Add a comma
Finally,
responds
from each gender.Replace the word
responses
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