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In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In many countries,
healthcare
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 costs are borne directly by
individuals
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,
while
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 others argue that medical services should be provided free of charge by the government. I strongly believe that
healthcare
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 should be publicly funded, as it is a basic human right and an essential pillar of social welfare. In nations with limited economic capacity, citizens often pay for medical
treatment
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 out of pocket because public
healthcare
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 systems are underfunded.
This
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 may ease government expenditure but imposes a heavy financial burden on
individuals
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.
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, in Pakistan, many public hospitals lack adequate facilities and staffing, compelling patients to seek
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 in private hospitals, where costs are substantially higher.
Such
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 an arrangement not only widens inequality but
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 prevents low-income families from receiving timely medical care.
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, a government-funded
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 system significantly improves public well-being. Since citizens already contribute through taxation, it is reasonable that these funds should be used to ensure equitable access to medical services. Free or subsidised
healthcare
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 enables all
individuals
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, regardless of financial background, to receive
treatment
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 for emergencies and chronic illnesses.
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, insurance programmes in the United States provide coverage for vulnerable groups
such
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 as the unemployed, reducing stress and allowing patients to focus on recovery rather than expenses.
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, when people enjoy good health, they are more productive, which benefits the economy in the long run. In conclusion,
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individuals
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 may sometimes choose private care, universal
healthcare
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 supported by the government is the most effective way to promote equality and improve national health outcomes.
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, I firmly agree that medical
treatment
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 should be freely accessible to all citizens, ensuring that quality
healthcare
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 is a right rather than a privilege.

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Task response
State your view in the first paragraph and keep to it.
Lexical resource
Use simple words and short sentences more; avoid hard or long terms.
Coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with clear words like 'also', 'but', 'for example' and have one idea per paragraph.
Content
Give careful facts and examples that match the question.
Grammar
Check grammar and punctuation; break long sentences into two to avoid mistakes.
Task response
The writer shows a clear view and strong stance.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, body, and end; good structure.
Content
Examples from real places help explain points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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