47.The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

47.The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table displays information about the
market
share
of notebook computer companies in the world in 2006, 2007 and 2014.
Overall
, HP has the largest proportion of
market
share
, followed by Dell. Fujitsu and other not-mentioned companies'
market
share
decreased over the
years
,
while
the others increased. HP had the largest
market
share
in all three
years
, in 2006, HP had a
market
share
of 31.4%,
this
increased to just over one-third in the next year and in 2014, it only rose by 0.25% to 34.25%. Dell started the
period
with 16.6%,
this
rose to around one-fifth in 2007 and to 26.12% in 2014. Companies not mentioned occupied 22.8% of the
overall
share
in 2006,
this
dropped to 19.3% in the next
years
, and it continued falling steadily to 7,11% in 2014. Toshiba and Lenovo had a similar proportion, with 6.2% and 6.6% respectively in 2006. In 2007
while
Toshiba grew moderately to 7.3% Lenovo went down to 6.2%,
while
in the
last
year of the
period
, they had a percentage of 8.12% and 7.1% respectively.
Finally
, Fujitsu had the lowest
market
share
in all three
years
, with 4.8% at the beginning of the
period
,
this
decreased by around a half to 2.3% and ended the
period
with 3.1%.
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