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An increasing number of people choose to live in big cities. what problems will this brings, how should the government encourage

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In the contemporary era, the rate of migration of commoners from rural
area
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 to urban
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 has rapidly increased. Undoubtedly,
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 phenomenon renders invitation to
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myriad
 issues but, some sensible solutions are
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 available to curb the grave concerns
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engendered
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 process of migration.
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 essay will shed light on problems and will mention solutions as well. To commence with the problems caused by augment in
population
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the population
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 of metropolitan cities. First and foremost is
overcrowded
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an overcrowded
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 atmosphere which
futher
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further
 leads to issues like housing crises, inflation, unemployment etcetera. Moving towards the worry of housing crises , as with augment in count of individuals in metropolitan cities the basic need of building homes as per
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 of citizens is shunned by authorities which results in inflation.
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, owing to scarcity of buildings owners raise the
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 of rent for rental units.To cite an example, in Canada, residents of
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city
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 of Toronto are paying sky- rocketing
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amount
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 of rent for single
occupany
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occupancy
occupant
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city
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 has become overcrowded
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facilities
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 it provides to citizens.
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, authorities should present some solutions to
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 issue. Probing ahead to the measures that can be taken. Government should invest
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amount
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 of wealth in countryside areas in order to create facilities and job opportunities for citizens of rural areas.
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,owing to the fact that commoners are duped into moving to developed cities by representing the tall and fascinating
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 on televisions
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therefore
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,
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 commercials should be disallowed. To exemplify, in India, individuals are lured by
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the standard
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 of living of eminent celebrities residing in
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city
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 of Mumbai , and the common people regret moving to that
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.
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,
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amount
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 of knowledge should be rendered to commoners. To recapitulate, as per the aforementioned notions it can be concluded that movement from urban to rural areas gives
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 to numerous problems
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,
government
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the government
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 should take
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initiative
 to educate people in order to eradicate the grave issues.
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