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In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
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 are adopting bad eating habits, which have detrimental effects on their health. Some counterparts of society believe that the legislature should impose a high HST on junk
food
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 that will result in
people
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 adopting better eating habits and lifestyles,
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 others argue
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 opinion. I,
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, side with the first view, and a concrete answer is given below in subsequent paragraphs. With a tight schedule and a hectic lifestyle, it is hard for adults to focus on their diet.
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, it is impossible to intake the right amount of nutrients in fast-paced lives. Office-going
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 usually prefer going to the drive-thru or ordering from platforms
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 as Uber Eats rather than taking home-made meals.
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, teenagers are fond of junk and frozen items, resulting in the slow development of their brains and health problems as well. To illustrate, the USA has the highest obesity rate of 56% with the lowest taxation rates. Easily available fast
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 ventures with low affordability prices lure individuals, and
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 they land on fast
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, which is concerning. Most of the population consuming fast
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 is aware of the consequences and results it can have on human health. By imposing higher taxes on these types of
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, healthy
food
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 should be made more affordable by the government, and its advantages should be told to the modern generation.
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,
people
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 of the early era used to live longer than
people
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 of the 20th century, as their eating habits were a lot better.
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, fast
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 was not available
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, and they used to consume natural resources, which resulted in slow
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.
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, by imposing a higher tax on fast
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, the government should
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 make healthier
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 more affordable and available. Ayurvedic products should be advertised more than fast
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 chains which are just temporary craving satisfiers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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