THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

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two part charts demonstrate why people in Great Britain

visit

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visited

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art

museum

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museums

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in 1990 and 2000.

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, most people go to

museum

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museums

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because they want to learn and gain

knowledge

in both 1990 and 2000. The

lagest

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lowest

percentage

in both

year

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years

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are learning and gaining

knowledge

to buy

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buying

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art

have

the

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small

percentagein

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percentage

percentage in

1990 and the small

percentage

in 2000 is

other

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another

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reason. To learn and gain

knowledge

, attend a special exhibit, spend time with friends and family,

buy

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and buy

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art

have increased

trend

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. To learn and gain

knowledge

which over a half of

percentage

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the percentage

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rised

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increased by

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1% in 2000, to buy

art

increased

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by 4

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% to 5% in 2000, to spend time with friends increased

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by 5

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% and to attend a special exhibit

rised

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increased by

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6% in 2000 . The reason of to fill their travel schedules and others are decreased.The

percentage

of to fill their travel schedules decreased to 12% which

have

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was

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a significant

decreased

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of 15% in 2000. The other reason

also

decreased 1 % in 2000.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

167 words

4.50

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

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