THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

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two part charts demonstrate why people in Great Britain

visit

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art

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museum

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museums

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in 1990 and 2000.

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, most people go to

museum

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museums

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because they want to learn and gain

knowledge

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in both 1990 and 2000. The

lagest

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lowest

percentage

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in both

year

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years

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are learning and gaining

knowledge

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to buy

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buying

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art

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have

the

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small

percentagein

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percentage

percentage in

1990 and the small

percentage

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in 2000 is

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reason. To learn and gain

knowledge

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, attend a special exhibit, spend time with friends and family,

buy

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and buy

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art

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have increased

trend

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trends

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. To learn and gain

knowledge

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which over a half of

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percentage

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rised

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1% in 2000, to buy

art

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increased

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% to 5% in 2000, to spend time with friends increased

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% and to attend a special exhibit

rised

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6% in 2000 . The reason of to fill their travel schedules and others are decreased.The

percentage

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of to fill their travel schedules decreased to 12% which

have

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a significant

decreased

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of 15% in 2000. The other reason

also

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decreased 1 % in 2000.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

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