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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people claim that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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 has been gaining
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more and more popularity. I believe that the development of it in the future may result in both positive and negative effects, which will be elaborated in
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 essay. On the one hand,
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 can bring positive impacts on both the economy, education and science.
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 can provide new employment opportunities and investment opportunities for both businesses and employees. A higher number of
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 trips can be synonymous with the higher income brought
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-based services that cater to
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 tourists.
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,
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 can
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 provide a boost for research and education. Through
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 travel, tourists can gain deeper insight into outer
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, broadening their horizons through activities that can never be found in boring and seemingly impractical science classes at school.
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, to improve the quality of
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 travel, substantial research needs to be done
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 encouraging more people to get involved in scientific research.
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, the development
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space
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 can inevitably result in some adverse impacts on the environment and the gap between the rich and the poor. Spacecraft launch is usually believed to lower the quality of air
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, exhaust from
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 engines can be responsible for long-term impact on the ozone layer. Another negative effect is widening the gap between the rich and the poor.
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 is usually exorbitant and not accessible to a large number of people in the world.
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 is the type of entertainment that may be enjoyed by only wealthy or
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 people;
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 why
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 activity can create negative attitudes from the public
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 highlight the already significant gap between the privileged and the poor. In conclusion,
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space
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 can be beneficial in terms of boosting the economy and education, it is my belief that
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 result in negatives.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
The main points are supported with relevant examples.
lexical resource
A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately.
grammatical range
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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