Space travel has been possible for some time and some people claim that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Recently
space
tourism
has been gaining
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more and more popularity. I believe that the development of it in the future may result in both positive and negative effects, which will be elaborated in
this
essay. On the one hand,
space
tourism
can bring positive impacts on both the economy, education and science.
To begin
with, the development
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space
tourism
can provide new employment opportunities and investment opportunities for both businesses and employees. A higher number of
space
trips can be synonymous with the higher income brought
to
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space
-based services that cater to
space
tourists.
In addition
,
space
tourism
can
also
provide a boost for research and education. Through
space
travel, tourists can gain deeper insight into outer
space
, broadening their horizons through activities that can never be found in boring and seemingly impractical science classes at school.
In addition
, to improve the quality of
space
travel, substantial research needs to be done
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therefore
encouraging more people to get involved in scientific research.
However
, the development
in
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space
tourism
can inevitably result in some adverse impacts on the environment and the gap between the rich and the poor. Spacecraft launch is usually believed to lower the quality of air
as well as
contribute to worsening the issue of global warming.
In addition
, exhaust from
spacecrafts’
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engines can be responsible for long-term impact on the ozone layer. Another negative effect is widening the gap between the rich and the poor.
Space
tourism
is usually exorbitant and not accessible to a large number of people in the world.
This
is the type of entertainment that may be enjoyed by only wealthy or
super wealthy
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people;
that is
why
this
activity can create negative attitudes from the public
as well as
highlight the already significant gap between the privileged and the poor. In conclusion,
although
space
tourism
can be beneficial in terms of boosting the economy and education, it is my belief that
this
can
also
result in negatives.
Submitted by Nhu Pham on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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