The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The four pie charts depict the information pertaining to the
populations
age in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and the prediction Fix the agreement mistake
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Overall
, the population count of Yeman and Italy fell drastically, the former for teenagers and the latter for adults in the following period.
To be more specific, in 2000, 46.3% of the populace were adults in Yemen and this
will reach approximately 57% in the year 2050. Moreover
, half of Italy's crowd were teenagers and then
will be dwindled
to 37% as predicted. In the initial year, old age people in Italy was only 3.6% which will escalate to 5.7% in 2050. Wrong verb form
dwindle
Furthermore
the individuals count in 2000, for the Italian adults and older people were 61.6 % and roughly 24% Add a comma
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then
it estimated
to be reached at nearly 46% and 42.3% respectively. Add a missing verb
is estimated
Lastly
, 14.3% of the Italian population was between 0-14 years in 2000.Submitted by vivekchovatiya8 on
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